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Post by Luutiont Sat Dec 26, 2009 9:27 pm

Name: Kira Katastrophe
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Rank: Genin
Appearance:
Spoiler:
Personality:Kira is Very sweet and thinks that he is the most Popular person in world and thinks that he is the Sh*t

History: Kira Lives nots far from the sand village, And one day while doing his hair he was visited by his good friend brook She had been kicked out from her house and was wondering if she could live with him. He of course said yes, After brook moved in with him they trained together almost all day everyday improveing there skills.


Kira has allways some what worshiped the kazekage hopeing to one day become stronger then him. He later joins up with Luutiont and brook to make a ninja team to improve his skills and moves to the mist village after fighting Luutiont. He is always training and is the strongest in his age group.

Specialty:Bloodline
Elements: N/A

Goals:None


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Post by Marixia Mon Dec 28, 2009 2:24 am

Can you separate your history into actual paragraphs instead of one big chuck?
Also, some of the stuff needs fixed. For instance for learned jutsu, remove the '[url=*Link*]Techniques[/url]' part since you already linked it. Remove the Jutsu link next to your goals as well and please spell 'Jutsu' correctly.

For future reference, when creating a character that is unfinished, please put (WIP) beside your subject title. So it would say 'Light Yagami (WIP)' in the heading.
This is so the mods and admins will know when you are done with your character and that it is ready for us to look over.
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Post by Luutiont Mon Dec 28, 2009 2:35 am

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Post by Kiyoshi Thu Dec 31, 2009 8:45 pm

Also, we have a thing where as if your first character is in a village, you cannot make them of the same village that you're first character's in.
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Post by Hatake Tane Fri Jan 01, 2010 6:08 pm

We changed things in skill specialty, the underlined note. Please check if yours need to be changed.
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Post by Luutiont Wed Jan 20, 2010 3:32 pm

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Post by The Science Freak Wed Jan 20, 2010 4:49 pm

RP with what you have first.
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Post by Luutiont Thu Jan 28, 2010 3:03 pm

Bump
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Post by Luutiont Sun Jan 31, 2010 3:54 pm

BUMP!
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Post by Marixia Sun Jan 31, 2010 4:44 pm

Need at least 2 paragraphs oh history for a Genin NPC

After this, nothing else until you start rping more with what you already have. If you can't think of anything to rp, train your character with his bloodline, running laps, or something along those lines. Even kunai practice and such wouldn't hurt.
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Post by Luutiont Sun Jan 31, 2010 4:58 pm

Kk this npc is so i can rp its for a mission mikami sent me on
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Post by Luutiont Sun Jan 31, 2010 5:03 pm

History isint very long but i cant really think of anything els to put in.
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Post by Marixia Sun Jan 31, 2010 5:30 pm

Er, I think the mission is most likely cancelled anyway because right not Kirigakure is being destroyed and Suna is closed. Everyone from Kiri is currently evacuating to Kumo, Konoha, or a smaller village.

Hehe, as for not thinking of anything there i plenty to talk about. Currently I have a character with a history of 20 pages and 12,923 words and I am nowhere near done (which I love to type and write stories too).

You can talk about their parents for example, home life, what made them into who they are today, how they ranked from academy to genin, etc. Basically, what made your character the way he is.
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