Kira (Changed plz take a look)
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Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Name: Kira Katastrophe
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Rank: Genin
Appearance:
History: Kira Lives nots far from the sand village, And one day while doing his hair he was visited by his good friend brook She had been kicked out from her house and was wondering if she could live with him. He of course said yes, After brook moved in with him they trained together almost all day everyday improveing there skills.
Kira has allways some what worshiped the kazekage hopeing to one day become stronger then him. He later joins up with Luutiont and brook to make a ninja team to improve his skills and moves to the mist village after fighting Luutiont. He is always training and is the strongest in his age group.
Specialty:Bloodline
Elements: N/A
Goals:None
Age: 15
Gender: Male
Rank: Genin
Appearance:
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History: Kira Lives nots far from the sand village, And one day while doing his hair he was visited by his good friend brook She had been kicked out from her house and was wondering if she could live with him. He of course said yes, After brook moved in with him they trained together almost all day everyday improveing there skills.
Kira has allways some what worshiped the kazekage hopeing to one day become stronger then him. He later joins up with Luutiont and brook to make a ninja team to improve his skills and moves to the mist village after fighting Luutiont. He is always training and is the strongest in his age group.
Specialty:Bloodline
Elements: N/A
Goals:None
Last edited by Luutiont on Sun Jan 31, 2010 5:02 pm; edited 4 times in total
Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Location : Lansing michigan
Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Can you separate your history into actual paragraphs instead of one big chuck?
Also, some of the stuff needs fixed. For instance for learned jutsu, remove the '[url=*Link*]Techniques[/url]' part since you already linked it. Remove the Jutsu link next to your goals as well and please spell 'Jutsu' correctly.
For future reference, when creating a character that is unfinished, please put (WIP) beside your subject title. So it would say 'Light Yagami (WIP)' in the heading.
This is so the mods and admins will know when you are done with your character and that it is ready for us to look over.
Also, some of the stuff needs fixed. For instance for learned jutsu, remove the '[url=*Link*]Techniques[/url]' part since you already linked it. Remove the Jutsu link next to your goals as well and please spell 'Jutsu' correctly.
For future reference, when creating a character that is unfinished, please put (WIP) beside your subject title. So it would say 'Light Yagami (WIP)' in the heading.
This is so the mods and admins will know when you are done with your character and that it is ready for us to look over.
Marixia- Kumo Chuunin
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Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Also, we have a thing where as if your first character is in a village, you cannot make them of the same village that you're first character's in.
Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
We changed things in skill specialty, the underlined note. Please check if yours need to be changed.
Hatake Tane- Konoha Chunnin
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Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
RP with what you have first.
The Science Freak- Hokage
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Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Need at least 2 paragraphs oh history for a Genin NPC
After this, nothing else until you start rping more with what you already have. If you can't think of anything to rp, train your character with his bloodline, running laps, or something along those lines. Even kunai practice and such wouldn't hurt.
After this, nothing else until you start rping more with what you already have. If you can't think of anything to rp, train your character with his bloodline, running laps, or something along those lines. Even kunai practice and such wouldn't hurt.
Marixia- Kumo Chuunin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Kk this npc is so i can rp its for a mission mikami sent me on
Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
History isint very long but i cant really think of anything els to put in.
Luutiont- Kiri Genin
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Re: Kira (Changed plz take a look)
Er, I think the mission is most likely cancelled anyway because right not Kirigakure is being destroyed and Suna is closed. Everyone from Kiri is currently evacuating to Kumo, Konoha, or a smaller village.
Hehe, as for not thinking of anything there i plenty to talk about. Currently I have a character with a history of 20 pages and 12,923 words and I am nowhere near done (which I love to type and write stories too).
You can talk about their parents for example, home life, what made them into who they are today, how they ranked from academy to genin, etc. Basically, what made your character the way he is.
Hehe, as for not thinking of anything there i plenty to talk about. Currently I have a character with a history of 20 pages and 12,923 words and I am nowhere near done (which I love to type and write stories too).
You can talk about their parents for example, home life, what made them into who they are today, how they ranked from academy to genin, etc. Basically, what made your character the way he is.
Marixia- Kumo Chuunin
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